Clothing descriptions. Vague is out. Prim is in.

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Clothing descriptions. Vague is out. Prim is in.

Postby Cogliostro » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:01 am

"A long piece of wool cloth drawn around the waist in nicely adjusted folds, the lower part falls to the knees, while the upper part is drawn up and adjusted to the left shoulder so that the right arm is perfectly free...."

1-2-3, time's up, how many people have any idea what piece of clothing this is? No one? Well, it's a great kilt. Let's try again here:

"a pair of moccasins made from single pieces of hide, each gathered together in a pucker around the foot..."

For this one, did anyone have trouble realizing that a pair of mocassins were meant? No one again. This time it was totally clear.

Question is, why do we have it like this? The word "mocassin" is not even English, certainly far less English than "great kilt" would have been. So it was OK for us to have that in the description, but for many other items for some reason that clarity is omitted. I suspect it was some consideration of "OOC-ness" that stopped the writer, but really it shouldn't have. We have to lean toward the practical. So I just have a simple suggestion, let's make all clothing descriptions honestly say (in the first few words of the sentence) what they are supposed to describe:

"A great kilt, comprising a long piece of wool cloth drawn around the waist in nicely adjusted folds, the lower part falls to the knees, while the upper part is drawn up and adjusted to the left shoulder so that the right arm is perfectly free...."

or, again:

"a pair of moccasins made from single pieces of hide, each gathered together in a pucker around the foot..."

- which is just perfect as it is!
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Postby Snake_byte » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:12 am

You're talking about in the character description page or the clothing manufacturing page?
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Postby Cogliostro » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:22 am

Yeah, in the character descriptions.
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Postby Snake_byte » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:46 am

Another way, which has been suggested, would be to have click-able clothing names in the charrie description page which would give a drop-down description of that article.
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Postby Dudel » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:48 am

Snake_byte wrote:Another way, which has been suggested, would be to have click-able clothing names in the charrie description page which would give a drop-down description of that article.


Irreverent to topic at hand.

Suggestion Simplification: Make item descriptions (clothes specifically in this statement) hold item name in them, somewhere (though a preference would be the first few words in said description), in order to prevent confusion.
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Postby Snake_byte » Thu Jan 07, 2010 10:28 am

Dudel wrote:
Snake_byte wrote:Another way, which has been suggested, would be to have click-able clothing names in the charrie description page which would give a drop-down description of that article.


Irreverent to topic at hand.

Suggestion Simplification: Make item descriptions (clothes specifically in this statement) hold item name in them, somewhere (though a preference would be the first few words in said description), in order to prevent confusion.

Um not irrelevant, as the idea is to make more easily known what the person is wearing. So, if it were a link with said clothing name but the name itself wasn't contained in description, it would be pretty much the same thing. You'd know what it is they're wearing AND you'd be able to see how it's being worn. ALSO this would cut down A LOT on the Charrie page clutter.
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Postby Dudel » Thu Jan 07, 2010 10:36 am

That requires a completely different system to be made. This suggestion can be done by language department, I think, just adding the <item name here> in it's description.

However it would require a good chunk of items looked at and edited. :lol:
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Postby Cogliostro » Fri Jan 08, 2010 5:36 am

That's right -- just a language department edit-job, for clarity and fashion style. No new systems were being suggested.

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