Non-Cantr-Related Poetry

[Dee]

.... You all are good poets... I may not like the topics of your poems but I like your poetic skills

Well, a lot of you have read my poetry... But here is my favorite one anyway, it's called I'm Guilty:

I'm sorry I didn't have the chance
To tell you how I really feel
You were gone in just a glance
I can't believe it happened for real

I still feel guilty for what I've done to you
I still hear your voice telling me not to
Not to do the pain to you
Not to do the hurt to you

But I didn't listen and pushed you away
And got you out of my heart
I never knew I will feel this dismay
Now all of my feelings are falling apart

You deserved much more than this love
You were an angel whom I've broken into pieces
You were everything my dreams were made of
But now I have nothing but this pain that increases

This is not the end I was expecting
You're the only one who I was respecting
Now I mourn the love I was neglecting
And the life I dreamed of perfecting

I'm sorry you were gone before I realize
All the love that was in your eyes
I'm sorry I kept watching as you fall
I'm sorry our love had hit the wall


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Inspired by a real life experience, after an ex-boyfriend of mine had died.

[Leo Luncid]

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme perfectly nor at all in some cases.

That's very true; I simply hate it when people assume it any other way. It's whole purpose is to evoke feelings onto the reader. Some people even consider rap as a type of poetry. As Paul Valery once said, "Prose [is] walking, poetry dancing."


Nixit, your poem's form and lack of rhyme certainly contribute to the overall feeling it evokes, but it only became clear until the last stanza, specifically the second sentence. Other than that, your choice of words and its placement were nice.


Nakranoth, your poem's really good as it gives off a consistent feeling, though I was unsure as to who the narrator is. At first I thought it was God, but that thought contradicts the title, doesn't it?


Dee, thanks for the compliment; even though you didn't directly compliment me(more so didn't directly critisize me), at least you're the only one who said it.
Your poem's good as well, but some of the long lines may need to shorten up so that it won't get stretched out and dull, but that's my opinion. You used good figurative language and repitition for emphasis. The rhyme pattern you've changed as the poem progresses. They all fit well.

[formerly known as hf]

Title:
Art

Here's some art...

I just pulled it


Out my arse

[Nixit]

Hm. Leo, what do you think it's about?

[A Neo Irony]

I made this poem up so long ago, I can't even remember how old I was. But I was damn young. And reading it now... I can't help but think it's damn stupid.

Enjoy.


I see a policeman in big purple tights,
He’s directing traffic off to the right.
There’s a pin on his shirt; what does it say?
“It’s wear what you want day.”

[Elros]

Here is a poem I wrote:

Without Your love

Like a flash of lightning,
without the rain.
Like a stained glass window,
with a broken pane.

Like a fierce lion,
without his roar.
Like a beautiful mansion,
without a door.

Like a nightingale,
without her voice.
Like a heavenly angel,
who cannot rejoice.

Like a child on christmas,
without a smile.
Like a thief in the night,
without any guile.

Like a glorious eagle,
without his wings.
Like a loyal kingdom,
who's lost their King.

Of all these things
i've written above,
I am far worse
without your love.

[west]

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme perfectly nor at all in some cases.

It does if it's an effing limerick.


A POEM I HAS WRIT
I wrote this just now uh I think it's really good okay guys.

This are a poem,
A poem I have writ.
I done gone and wrote it,
And this here is it.

A poem gotta rhyme,
And has to have rhythm.
I run outta time.
A good word is 'kitten'.

I coulda been worser;
You should be quite thank
-ful that I didn't
Write verse that be blank.

It's easy and simple
And not very hard
To keep hittin' Enter
after
each
word.

But just cuz you space it
With random line breaks
Don't make it mean nothin'.
That's common mistakes.

I guess what I's sayin'
In words fast and slow-etry
You can use forms poetic,
But it don't make it poetry.

[Elros]

LOL!!! Great poeam West!

[Nakranoth]

Nakranoth, your poem's really good as it gives off a consistent feeling, though I was unsure as to who the narrator is. At first I thought it was God, but that thought contradicts the title, doesn't it?

Look at the second to last line... the title fits the narrarator perfectly... its a recursive biblical parody.