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Nevermind
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 6:54 pm
by rklenseth
Nevermind
Re: Finally, Chapter 1 of my Cantr Epic
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:22 pm
by Cookie
The your writing style is similar to a shopping list. ...no offence.
For example.
Chapter 1 wrote:The dense forest provided very little area to manuever in. The trees were ancient, probably standing for several hundred years if not a thousand. The world grew up beneath the canopy of thick green and brown and now it thrived. The birds sang and wild cats laid in wait above the leaf littered floor. Deer pranced around and every now and then a moose could be heard calling in the distance for a lover.
Descriptive content needs narative too you know. Otherwise you might aswell be reading...a shopping list.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:28 pm
by rklenseth
Is it really that bad?
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:29 pm
by Cookie
Put it this way. Don't know why your bothering to write an 'epic.'
Focus your spare time on other things, I'm sure you have other talents. Try taking up the fiddle.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:32 pm
by rklenseth
Well, I guess you're right. I always thought I was a good writer but everytime I write it would never seem right. Well at least I have other hobbies.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:46 pm
by Black Canyon
Wait! Why not give the rest of us a chance to read it?
Cookie Monster hates everything.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:48 pm
by Lumin
I was pretty impressed, actually.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:50 pm
by Cookie
Black Canyon wrote:Cookie Monster hates everything.
Some people in this world know that aint true.
...they don't play Cantr.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:51 pm
by the_antisocial_hermit
Black Canyon wrote:Wait! Why not give the rest of us a chance to read it?
*agrees*
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:54 pm
by Cookie
If you do, tell me so I can go and watch some paint dry instead.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:57 pm
by the_antisocial_hermit
Oh, come on, Cookie. You've read it and given your opinion. You don't have to read it again if you don't want to. That was a completely uncalled for and rude post.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 7:59 pm
by Cookie
I'm not going to read it again. And I was kidding.d
But for the record, I could do way better!
To be honest I never said he should take it down.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 9:36 pm
by Dee
WHAT??? Are you going to stop writing just because one person didn't like what you wrote? (And I agree, he dislikes everything)
C'mon, be fair and give us a chance to judge your work!!
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 10:25 pm
by rklenseth
As of this time I think it would be best not to release it. I'm sorry if some of you wanted to read it but right now I am going toward another option instead.
It may, depending on the other option, be available for reading in the future.
Sorry to everyone who wanted to read it. And to those that don't, well you can join Monster in watching paint dry.
Posted: Tue Jan 24, 2006 10:56 pm
by Trae
....that's messed up...*wanted to read it*...
*cries*